Write a dialogue with 4-5 of the comments from your peer or me on your paper. Directions in Week 4. Post in your blog either by copying/pasting or by using Add Media and uploading.
Caralyn; I like this point, maybe you should add a paragraph explaining why we shouldn’t all blend in
Camryn; I like this idea because it can help tie in my conclusion to the rest of the paper. Since I was entirely finished this can help me see what I need to add throughout to help make my conclusion easier to understand.
Caralyn; I would put in your personal story after you explain more in detail what covering is. so just slide your story down to the end of this paragraph.
Camryn; This is really helpful. I like it because I didn’t realize that I didn’t explain covering a lot and just jumped into personal story. This way the readers now have an idea of what covering is then how it relates to my life.
Carol; Not so sure about this. Doesn’t Yoshino give us examples where people consciously decided to change their names or hide their disability? Didn’t they do that on purpose?
Camryn; I didn’t think really of this point. I know I read about the people who did but never thought about putting that in so that is something I want to incorporate into my paper. Saying like some people do and some people don’t because they are really trying to hide a part of themselves.
Caralyn and Carol; add this other places in the paper, you make really good points and it would make your argument greater if you went into more detail Yes, I agree. I particularly like your idea about blending into nothing. And I see opportunities to use Yoshino to elaborate on these points.
Camryn; These help me again know what I should put throughout my paper. I havent talked about blending in so making the point in my conclusion I should be putting it throughout my paper. This should help me expand my reasons and add more depth to my paper.
